I wrote two versions of this drabble. Which do you like more?
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Version 1:
I am green like the eyes of my painter. I can be a leaf or grasshopper, but never a stop sign.
I am red like the hair on my painter. I have been spilled on battlefields and forged in fire. Never will you find me blue, for I am passion personified.
I am blue like the mood of my painter. I am the sky, the sea and a berry. Humor me not for I am sad by nature.
I am your painter. Mix thyself into white to cover these errors I have made in black ballpoint on this loan application.
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Version 2:
I am green and I serve thee. I can be a leaf or grasshopper, but never a stop sign. Master, what do you bid of me?
I am red and I serve thee. I have been bled on battlefields and forged in fire but never will I feel blue. Master, what do you bid of me?
I am blue and I serve thee. I am the sky, the sea and a mood. Humor me not master, what do you bid of me?
I am your master and I bid thee mix with flit. For without light, I can't see shit.
I am red and I serve thee. I have been bled on battlefields and forged in fire but never will I feel blue. Master, what do you bid of me?
I am blue and I serve thee. I am the sky, the sea and a mood. Humor me not master, what do you bid of me?
I am your master and I bid thee mix with flit. For without light, I can't see shit.
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Again, drabbles must be exactly 100 words. Here's an extra credit question: One of the above versions is actually WRONG. Can you tell which one and why?
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